My Poem: Future

[TheFriendlyAnarchist]

first though, I was told there was a writing forum. Any ideas?

advice and critiscm is needed, and appriciated, thank you

O, what random mysteries our future hold?
Shall we wash away with death and cold?
Or turn away, and linger with life,
Yet the two are no different, the same edge of the knife
Will we drift apart and will our dreams break,
Be still with no meaning, but foundations still shake?

The days of our lives are numbered, and few,
We take what we get, and never pay due
Exisence eternal will be barren, and grey
And our broken souls will still linger, for each damn fucking day

[Spider Web]

1. Different Strokes for Different Folks.

Seems like 'a bummer type poem' to me.

Why not replace the word "fucking" with
something like "eternal" ?

'S'

[TheFriendlyAnarchist]

2. Yea, I'll prolly end up changing that. . .

on another note, welcome to DU :toast: