My newest poem, ready for prime time...Flame

[CaliforniaPeggy]

Ah, your tongue is a flame
I’m glowing now
I want to be burned
By you

We will create a space
upon the grass

Where we will wrap and twist and coil

The wind might blow over us
But we’ll never feel it pass

The dark shade of the trees
Will hide us
From everyone
They’ll never see us there
They won’t see us come undone

They won’t see us completed
They won’t see us become
One.

Ah, your tongue is a flame
There will be no end to us
Or our ecstasy...

[UrbScotty]

1. Thank you, my dear CaliforniaPeggy!

:-)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

3. My dear UrbScotty!

No, no...thank you!

:hug:

[derby378]

2. Better loosen the collar a bit...

:blush:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

My dear derby378!

Yours? Or mine?

Thanks, sweetie...:hug:

[CreekDog]

4. Beautiful

i like the imagery. :hi:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

9. My dear CreekDog!

Oh, thank you, sweetie...

Glad you do!

:hi:

[FarLeftRage]

5. You certainly have a way with words

This kind of reminds me of e e cummings...

[CaliforniaPeggy]

10. My dear FarLeftRage!

Wow, thank you!

I admire his work so damn much!

:hi:

[PBS Poll-435]

6. Wow

Excellent.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

11. My dear PBS Poll-435!

Glad you think so!

Thank you...

:hi:

[seaker]

7. You words paint a picture

evoking memories warm and lingering..Bless you :blush:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

12. My dear seaker!

I am so glad that my little work evokes such warm memories...

Thank you...

:hug:

[Tom Kitten]

8. That is rather hot!

Peggy what's gotten into you?

[CaliforniaPeggy]

13. My dear Tom Kitten!

It is rather...

What's gotten into me?

Nothing!

I'm just finding my voice...;-)

[elshiva]

14. This is so sexy. It's a great poem.

I'm in love with someone now. I wish I could kiss him and feel his tongue inside me. Everyone knows who it is, so I won't say his name. :loveya:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

15. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, my dear elshiva...

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:

[elshiva]

16. Thank YOU! Really captures the mood.

:hug: :hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

17. Kick!

:kick:

[Lionel Mandrake]

18. This poem would have warmed up the crowd

in Washington DC on January 20.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

20. My dear Lionel Mandrake!

I think you're correct...

It was a pretty cold day!

:hi:

[OmahaBlueDog]

19. I've never seen welding described quite so vividly

Naw...just funnin'

I liked it.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

22. My dear OmahaBlueDog!

Welding?

:rofl:

You make me laugh, sweetie...

Glad you like it!

Thank you...

[Prisoner_Number_Six]

21. My previous comments stand unchanged

Except to say it's even better now.

Sending you a PM in a few.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

23. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six...

Thank you, sweetie...

I am so honored!

I did hesitate to further edit it, after what you said before...

But I truly felt that the little change I made did make it stronger...

Thank you...

:hug:

I will be alert to your PM.

[TK421]

24. Awesome Peggy!

that was a bit....steamy! Very well done! :D

[CaliforniaPeggy]

25. My dear TK 421!

Ah, sweetie...

So glad you enjoyed this!

There's life in the old dame yet...;)


Thank you!

[Haole Girl]

26. Oh! You finished it!

:applause:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

27. My dear Haole Girl!

I did finish it! I'll be reading it tomorrow night at the open mic!

Thanks for coming by, sweetie...

Thank you for the applause...

I hope you feel much better today!

:hug:

[Haole Girl]

28. Thanks

I feel a little better today. It feels like the cold that never ends, though. :hug:

[BeachBaby]

29. Wow. Just wow.

Would it be copyright infringement if I were to use this for, uh, something? :hide:

Well done, girl. You're such a talented woman. :hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

30. My dear BeachBaby!

I would be honored in the extreme if you were to use this for something! Just with proper attribution...

And thank you!

Your very kind remarks mean a lot to me...

Occasionally the words come out the way I want them to.

:hug:

[3.14158675309]

31. I'll be on my bunk....

Thank you for the wonderful imagery, CP! :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

32. My dear 3.14158675309!

Hehehe...

Thank you for the wonderful compliments!

:hug:

[raptor_rider]

33. Just had to bump this up

Wonderful poem Peggy. All of the lovers out there can relate to your words.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

34. My dear raptor_rider...

Thank you, sweetie...

For your very kind words, and for the bump...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

And it's my hope that all the lovers who've read this can relate to it too...

:hug: