A new poem...this one's dark.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

“A Death in the Family”

Where’d she go?
I haven’t seen much of her
She shows up for meals
Not much else

She isn’t talking
Head down
Eyes averted
Doesn’t want company
She’s gone after eating.

Oh there she is
Over there
In that dark corner
She’s reading
That’s the most social thing
I’ve seen her do in a while

No, no
Leave her alone
If you approach her
Well, nothing good comes of it.

She acts as though there’s been

A death in the family



© MLC

[BlueIris]

1. Good, but I think it could be even longer.

Just my $.02.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

2. Thanks, my dear BlueIris...

Constructive criticism is always welcome!

It could be longer, I suppose...

It felt right to me to stop where I did.

:hi:

[Parche]

3. My Dear CaliforniaPeggy

"death" its a debt we must all pay- George Washington




:hug: :loveya:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

4. My dear Parche...

Ah, I've heard that quote, but never knew who said it...

Thank you, sweetie, for informing me!

And how true it is, too...

:loveya: :hug:

[Tobin S.]

5. I can relate to that although maybe from a different perspective

The poem describes the way I probably looked outwardly when I was struggling with a mental illness. I didn't talk much. I prefered to not be around people. I was constantly in pain. I was hostile at times.

Nice work, Peggy. :thumbsup:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

6. My dear Tobin!

Now, that's an interesting perspective.

I thank you for that...it's something I had not considered.

Glad you enjoyed it!

:hi:

[NanceGreggs]

7. "If you approach her ...

... well, nothing good comes of it."

Don't I know it.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

8. Ah, my dear Nance...

:hug:

[Strong Atheist]

9. Hmm..... nt.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

11. My dear Strong Atheist...

:shrug:

[Strong Atheist]

13. Ah, ignore me. I don't like depressing things, my life has enough

of that...

I am just grumpy...

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

15. Oh, no worries, sweetie...

You can be grumpy in my threads any old time, OK?

:hug:

[Strong Atheist]

17. I saw your post in the sinking thread linking to this, so I thought I

would kick it, even if I don't like depressing things. Therefore the "Hmmm...." with no comment. Anyhoo, I have to go to bed soon; on the road back home tomorrow. Should be there by Thursday. Yay! Don't like traveling; being places is ok, but not travelling...

[CaliforniaPeggy]

18. That was very sweet of you...

I really appreciate it.

Have a great sleep!

Safe travels too...

:hug:

[akbacchus_BC]

10. My dear CPeg, that is a beautiful poem and if you used a he, it

would describe my oldest brother to a Tee. Unfortunately, he passed away in September 2007 due to an accident. Thank you for the lovely poem!

[CaliforniaPeggy]

12. My dear akbacchus_BC...

Ah, sweetie...

My deepest condolences on the loss of your beloved brother...

And I'm so pleased you like my poem...

:hug:

[newcriminal]

14. I can relate to this one. Thank you, Peggy. I enjoyed it.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

16. My dear newcriminal...

I imagine you can...

Glad you enjoyed it!

Thank you...

:hug:

[Callalily]

19. Your are right, it's

a bit dark. I'm still contemplating how I feel about this poem. Mixed emotions, but maybe that was your intention.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

20. My dear Callalily...

Well, I didn't have any real intentions with this one. I was in a dark place, and I wanted to get it expressed...

Thank you for your comments!

I always appreciate them.

:hi: