My poem Morning

[CaliforniaPeggy]

Sun tips
up
over the dawn
the moon slinks
away

all is still
no pulse
of air

the earth
holds her
breath

we
tilt
like blooms
toward

warmth
and
nourishing
light

Day
breaks




© 2010 MLC

[abq e streeter]

1. so "simple" and yet says so much....

wonderful

[CaliforniaPeggy]

2. My dear abq e streeter...

I appreciate your very kind words...

This style is just what I'm striving for.

On edit: Thanks!

[MiddleFingerMom]

3. My Dear CaliforniaPeggy:

.
Beautiful. Once again, the distillation of a wonderful, powerful
moment down to its basic elements.
.
In other words, poetry as poetry should be.
.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

4. My dear MiddleFingerMom...

Ah, I thank you.

I greatly appreciate your comments.

[Prisoner_Number_Six]

5. One word.

WOW.

:headbang:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

6. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six!

Only one?

Just kidding, sweetie!

Thank you so much...

:hug:

[seaker]

7. I feel

as though you were looking out the window with me...

[CaliforniaPeggy]

9. My dear seaker...

And maybe I just am...

Thanks, sweetie...

:hug:

[Haole Girl]

8. Aww

Nice :-)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

10. My dear Haole Girl...

Thanks, sweetie!

:hug:

[bluesbassman]

11. I love this line...

"the earth holds her breath". What a marvelous description of that ever so brief moment. Best time of the day.

Great job Peggy! :applause:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

12. My dear bluesbassman!

I was looking for just the best words for that moment...

Those showed up. It's so very still then, and I hoped I had communicated that...

Thank you, sweetie!

:hug:

[SeattleGirl]

13. Oh, Peggy, that is beautiful!

You are turning into quite the poet!

:loveya: :hug: :loveya:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

14. My dear SeattleGirl!

Oh, sweetie, I thank you so much!

That is high praise indeed...

I'm so glad you enjoyed this...

:loveya: :hug: :loveya:

[theNotoriousP.I.G.]

15. Beautiful Peggy

and since I have never once in my life been awake to witness a daybreak, I thank you for telling me what it's like :)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

17. My dear theNotoriousP.I.G...

And what makes you think I have?

It's very rare...

But even mid-morning can look like this...

Good to see you, sweetie...

Thank you!

:hug:

[Callalily]

16. Your poem is a

perfect description of morning.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

18. Thank you, my dear Callalily...

That was my aim...

:hug: