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Wheezy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 12:37 AM
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I would really appreciate feedback on this article -
Hi. I'm pretty new here, and this is my first second thread I've started at DU (thanks Rev Cheesehead), so I'm still a little nervous trying to learn the ropes at DU, but I could use your help.

I am a former Republican, in recovery for the past 8 or 9 years now (since Clinton's second term). :-) I'm also a freelance writer. Below is an article I've written out of frustration for often being put in a box labeled 'religious right' because I call myself a Christian. I'm about to begin searching for a newspaper/magazine home for it. I would really appreciate any critiques, comments, feedback, or concerns about it, and would welcome suggestions for places to submit this. My main concern is that I do not want to offend progressives (Christian or otherwise) by assuming anything--my feelings about how Christians as a whole are sometimes viewed by progressives are meant to inform, not to offend. Can you tell me if this is offensive?


Crying Out Loud

by Lisa McMann


As a woman of faith whose mind is boggled by the forceful, imposing politics of the Religious Right, I wonder where my peers are hiding. What has become of you? And why are we allowing society to stereotype all Christians as supporters of the radically conservative agenda? Is it because the Right is talking so loudly that we cannot think on our own? I cry out to troubled Christians to speak up and separate your values from the rhetoric of those who try to impose political rights and wrongs upon faith.

If you use Christ as your guide, simply re-examine his teachings. Jesus is the epitome of love for all people. He never condemned anyone based on race, color, creed, or sexual preference. He cried out to his followers to feed the hungry and provide for the less fortunate. He separated God and Caesar. He spoke out against hypocrites, and those who judge others. As a Christian, I cannot support the Religious Right’s leaders who judge my relationship with my God based upon my political views. Faith is personal, and being politically conservative is not a prerequisite for salvation through Christ.

As a Christian, I support the rights of all people, black or white, male or female, gay or straight. I realize that family values are based on mutual love, respect, and sacrifice for each other. I notice that even though we’ve not allowed gays to marry each other, our nation’s divorce rate is higher than ever. And when I observe the dedicated relationships my homosexual friends are in, I see stronger bonds than in many heterosexual marriages. I see kids with two mommies or two daddies being raised to love and live without bigotry. And I see a group of people whose American rights are violated. How can I refuse to acknowledge this? How could I possibly believe that their marriages to each other could be harmful to my family values? What exactly are Christians so afraid of--being wrong?

I see people dying of incurable diseases in this country, and I see a way to conquer that through stem-cell research, using embryos which otherwise would be discarded. I also see so many living, breathing babies who need to be adopted far more desperately than frozen embryos do.

I see homelessness and poverty on the rise, children living out of vehicles. They sit on curbs of dirty streets, eating out of smashed Burger King bags which have been tossed as trash from passing vehicles. While conservatives incessantly pound the table on behalf of the unborn, they turn a blind eye to the already born.

I see our country’s budget in shambles, and I hear people laugh, “If this administration can’t balance their budget, why should I balance mine?” Hand in hand with the President, we forget that ‘wants’ are not ‘needs’, and we go into collective, exorbitant debt. Then we wonder why so many people file bankruptcy or lose their homes to bank foreclosure. And we wonder, as we drive past homeless shelters while playing Christian music in our SUVs, why these places are so full that they are forced to turn families away—yes, children too. But moments after passing that shelter, we forget again.

Our Veterans, schools, and Medicare patients are suffering from budget cuts. Our health care system is designed for corporate America. People with curable illnesses are denied life-saving procedures because they have no health insurance, and they can’t pay the cost up front. Yet Terri Schiavo’s life was apparently worth the millions of our tax dollars spent in getting Congress involved. At the same time, a baby in Texas was taken off life support against the parents’ wishes, because state law, signed in place by then-Governor George W. Bush, demanded it. Indeed, I hope the family of that child understands. I hope the eleven million children in this country who are not covered by any health plan can understand. What have we become, when we piously proclaim “The Passion of the Christ” and forget the compassion of Christ?

We are in an unjust and unjustified war. Our faithful troops and their families suffer without adequate pay or sufficient armor. And some of them suffer a loss from which they’ll never fully recover. This administration’s “War on Terror” is against a country who did not threaten us, who did not direct planes to fly into U.S. buildings, who did not have Weapons of Mass Destruction. Recently, the Downing Street Memo implicated our President in fixing Intelligence to justify this war—this war that didn’t need to happen. Yet Republican Congressional leaders want to ignore it--put it in the basement where nobody has to look at it. America is becoming known as the bully who tortures foreign prisoners and mocks their religious beliefs, and our administration would rather deny it or point fingers than make it right. And somewhere along the way, before our very eyes, our President turned Osama bin Laden into Saddam Hussein…because he can. Because we let him. How many times will we let him deceive us? Meanwhile, the blood of 100,000 of God’s own people is on our hands.

As a Christian, I am horrified by what this nation has become under the current administration, where our God-fearing president is unable or unwilling to humble himself before the American people and apologize when he is wrong. I think again to Jesus, the humblest of all, who spoke often of forgiveness. Jesus, the gentle leader, who was noted for hanging out with the unpopular crowd. Sometimes Christians who speak out against popular Religious Right views may not appear quite as holy as the others. But such is the nature of Jesus—he had no goals of impressing anyone.

Some of you might agree to consider my words. If so, take a fresh look at the actions of the progressive leaders in this country. Are they passionate about the poor in spirit and those who mourn? Are they speaking up for the less fortunate? Do they consider the lilies, and the rest of this world that we believe God gave us? Reconsider your reasons for your political stance, and look for those whose hearts are generous and whose actions mimic what Jesus taught.

Above all, please don’t allow your Christian beliefs to be determined by a political party. Rather, let your beliefs help you decide what issues are important. Christians must strive to be on God’s side, rather than manipulate God to conform to a political party’s side. I hope you’ll stand firm in your faith, determine your political concerns, and cry out loud in hopes someone will hear you and join in when you say: I am a Christian, and the Religious Right does not speak for me.

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(Many thanks in advance for taking the time to read it.)


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burrowowl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 12:47 AM
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1. Good article!
Kick

:kick: :kick: :kick:
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ardem Donating Member (5 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 01:05 AM
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2. Hey Lisa
I believe you have written a good Letter to the Editor. While I appreciate and agree with most of what you have said, there is no supporting documentation for your claims. Example: what statistics show homelessness and poverty to be on the rise?
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lady lib Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 01:06 AM
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3. Very nicely said and I agree with you 100%.
Don't know about publications - you might check with Soujourners.
http://www.sojo.net/ (I suspect most of their readers have a liberal bent so you might be preaching to the choir.)
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Chan790 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 01:08 AM
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4. It's a little too distant from your subject.
It nicely conveys that Christians can be progressive too, but I never really get a vibe for why you feel that this view of Christianity in the political realm is more correct than the prevailing conservative Christian POV.(That you feel this way comes through, but not the why. To use an old quote from my writing professor: Whenever you can, show it instead of say it.) I can understand not wanting to be too aggressive in that way, but I think it reinforces a prevailing problem of the progressive Christian position as it is commonly laid out; an unwillingness to cite examples of the conservative POV as unchristian or less Christian in the outcomes of its' policies by contrasting those directly with the actions of Jesus. You obviously believe this to be true, both based on your closing and your short intro bio of being a former Republican that is in recovery. Speak to that truth.

Thinking about the more prominent conservative Christian voices out there, they certainly don't spare the Christian left any free shot they can take. I appreciate the Christian value of turning the other cheek (as one that the Christian right doesn't always uphold) but in politics and political writing, it is vital to hit back sometimes.

Overall, a very nice article though, I think you have the framework for the makings of a very strong argumentive piece or for the overview piece to a framework or series of more specific tpoic-focused articles.

(Please forgive any miscapitalized or uncapitalized uses of the word Christian. I was raised Catholic and am a Taoist by choice so I'm never really sure when to capitalize Christian.)
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beam me up scottie Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 01:17 AM
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5. Really great article.
I'm not qualified to critique your work, so I'll just say Bravo!
:applause:
Welcome to DU, Wheezy !
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Wheezy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 12:16 PM
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6. Wow, thanks!
I appreciate all the feedback. I should have mentioned my intention is for this to be Op-ed style, but I think adding a few references/statistics would make it stronger as some of you have mentioned.

Thanks to you all--very, very helpful suggestions of which I will certainly use many. If not on this piece, then on the next. I find the DU site to be overflowing with information and a wonderful variety of perspectives. I'm so glad I stumbled in here.
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RevCheesehead Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 02:12 PM
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7. Great job. Nominated.
Thanks for re-posting, Wheezy. :hi:
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silverlib Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jun-29-05 11:09 PM
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8. Nominated - n/t
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Wheezy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jul-01-05 09:51 PM
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9. Thank you.
I appreciate the nominations (wow, a first!), and all the help.

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alrightjim Donating Member (40 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jul-01-05 10:18 PM
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10. Hi Wheezy
I agree with most of your politics, but I can't see the reason why your Christianity is an issue. Atheists have their political leanings, there are Conservative and Liberal atheists, but they don't bring their atheism or skepticism into politics as a general rule. I can't see where your faith is an issue in your secular perceptions, political or otherwise, and I CAN see where the Fundamental right wingers making their faith the prime secular determinant is exactly what is the matter with them.

If you are a Christian, reread James 4:4. I am an atheist, but were I a Christian, James 4:4 would trouble me deeply. Liberal Christians tend to be accepting and loving and tolerant, as opposed to the sanctimonious busybodies Conservative Christians are. Liberal Christians tend to honor secular principles when it comes to society, and keep their religion separate. Most understand you can't sound off politically about your faith because society must impartially service all people, regardless of faith, or lack of faith. Your Christianity is all very well and good, and I am sure it is a wonderful thing for you personally, but I don't want to hear about it when it comes to political matters. I don't share your faith, and where and when it alters your political stance as a matter of prinicple, nothing wrong with stating such, but when it gets to the point it is overtly directing your politics, like it does with many GOP rank and file, then it is an undemocratic and socially harmful activity, because every law and every program of secular society must stand on secular prinicple which benefits or punishes every citizen equally, it CANNOT be based on the merit of a given faith, regardless of how popular or prevalant that faith is, or how sacred the faithful believe it to be.

Other than that, I liked your article.

Jimmy
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ayeshahaqqiqa Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jul-04-05 12:32 PM
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11. You are invoking the teachings of Jesus
not the empty rhetoric spewed forth by preachers who, imho, appear to be intent upon their own power and glory.

I think it is difficult for people who really follow the teachings of Christ to be heard. For one thing, the media isn't interested in covering you and your actions any more than they are interested in covering stories about moderate and progressive Muslims who practice tolerance and understanding.

So what do people do? Write good articles as you have, and publish them where you can. Make handbills, talk to people individually, join together with others. Remember, wherever two or more of you gather, I AM is there.
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Stevepol Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jul-04-05 07:23 PM
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12. A good article. I'd agree with what some others have said.
The ideas are excellent, though you could use some details (facts, data, not too many necessarily but well-chosen ones).

As for publication, after adding some details (that you yourself find and are struck by), I'd check (1) Google (google knows everything) about progressive religious publications. I doubt a fundamentalist conservative publication would publish you. (2) Check the Writer's Market in the library, the religious section in there. Or (3) just browse through magazines in a newsstand.

Read a little in each magazine you consider to see if the language and approach fits you, follow the requirements of the particular mag you choose, then send it off.

You could also consider as another post suggested taking single points and sending several much shorter letters to the editor, or just one on the point you think is most salient.

Good luck.
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