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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jan-12-05 07:01 PM
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My Secret Place. (Oh no it cannot be!)
Another poem by 180. Fear not I have only a few left!

My Secret Place.

An old man now I slip and stumble

Down a steep embankment.

I pause briefly to catch my breath,

My time held in abatement!

I see then with visions frozen,

Kaleidoscope scenes of times long passing!

Of childhood's dreams passing, flashing.

Of children crying, of children laughing.

On my galvanized feet a brook is splashing.

Great oak trees rise above me,

With acorns heavy on branches bending.

A thousand greens, their colors clashing.

Bubbling water with crayfish hiding

Beneath those stones each once familiar.

My rising sun shows streaks vermilion.

This secret place my God has given.

A time machine with endless cycles.

An eternal place without beginning.

A restful place which has no ending.

My secret place of childhood's yearning.


From 'Voyages of the Vicky Mary'

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ContraBass Black Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jan-12-05 07:06 PM
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1. Question
Can you explain the purpose and function of the exclamation points in lines 5 and 7?
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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jan-12-05 07:25 PM
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2. Probably not!
They are of no consequence!

Hee hee hee!

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JitterbugPerfume Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Jan-12-05 07:31 PM
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3. A dream of childhood lost
a lovely poem
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Mad_Dem_X Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Jan-13-05 10:05 AM
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4. Very nice!
:hi:
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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Jan-13-05 11:04 AM
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5. Well thank you!
Whoops! Must watch punctuation marks.

I wrote that almost thirty years ago. About twenty years ago I walked along the NY Central tracks until I came to that place. I struggled down the steep embankment. It was just as I had written it.

Sigh. Never again.

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