a new poem- "The Snowstorm"

[WindRavenX]

It hasn't been edited. It's an attempt to be a bit more cheery then my more somber city-scape poems...it's from the weekend that the huge blizzard struck Boston and my boyfriend stayed with me for the weekend. There was just such an oddly quiet mood when we woke up Sunday morning....which I tried to capture. My boyfriend is like many of us on DU- sensitive, emotionally, to the great injustice in this world...and sometimes I just don't know what to do. He's just so...brilliant...and I can't stand to see him be hurt by this world....

"The Snowstorm"

These nights are cold and bare.
Your form, covered in blankets,
stirred when a shriek of wind
threw itself against the window.
Even the city lights outside are masked,
blurred and splintered
by the wind and ice
of the storm.
Your eyes opened, grey as the ashen sky,
and pierced me.
My dear, this world will destroy you.
I can see it
in the green flecks of your eyes,
a fear of that world
outside the window.
I understand, my dear
why.
Do not fear:
lie with me, embrace me.
Let me cover you.
Smell my flesh
and sleep.

[The Sheik]

1. Boo!

Your poetry aint welcome here!

[WindRavenX]

2. oh? wrong forum?

:shrug:

[The Sheik]

3. NO!

[WindRavenX]

4. holy shit dude

What crawled up your ass?

[The Sheik]

5. YOU DID!

[WindRavenX]

6. alrighty

Buh-bye asshat :hi:

[The Sheik]

8. HUH? YOU TALKIN TO ME?

[RevolutionaryActs]

9. Any particular reason you're being an ass?

[WindRavenX]

10. Well, after reading this thread:

http://www.democraticunderground.com/discuss/duboard.php?az=view_all&address=105x2672234#2672266

I think we both know what's up...

[Downtown Hound]

12. Not cool at all dude

Show some respect.

[RevolutionaryActs]

7. Awww that's really sweet, I like it. Thank you for sharing

:-)

[KitchenWitch]

11. That is beautiful

I really like your poem.

[WindRavenX]

13. thank you

Did it capture that "quiet" mood I tried to describe ?

[KitchenWitch]

18. yes it did,

I pictured candlelight and soft music.

and I am thankful that you linked to it from that lounge post, or I would have missed it!

[Redstone]

20. You mean the "quiet" that settles over everything

when there's a snowstorm without much wind?

Yes, it did.

Redstone

[Lefta Dissenter]

14. WRX

That was lovely! But did you have to post that while Mr. Dissenter is out of town? It makes me want to snuggle up under the safety of an enormous pile of blankets and comforters, and I don't mean alone!

Your boyfriend is very fortunate, by the way. :hug:

[Bluebear]

15. I have an image for your poem

which is lovely by the way

[WindRavenX]

17. perfect!

It captures that grey...ashen grey...sky...perfectly.
It looks quiet too...which is so important. It's like the storm mutes the world.

[WI_DEM]

16. your poem is excellent

Congratulations.

By the way, The Shiek has been tombed as the disruptor (with no taste) he was.

[WindRavenX]

19. I saw

A :toast: to the mods

[joeybee12]

21. I like it--for what it's worth, the word "splintered" makes it for me...

...seems very appropriately used, and sets the tone.

BTW, apparently you pissed someone off!