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Wetzelbill Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jul-17-05 08:10 AM
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I was just messing around and wrote this
Edited on Sun Jul-17-05 08:13 AM by Wetzelbill
Probably tinker with it forever too. :)


Alabaster skin caped in ivory
Golden beam drenches the air
She illuminates the world at an altar
A future snapshot preserved forever

That day held my heart etched memory
She radiated an aurora dawn engulfing me
A smile cantillates nonexistent songs in ears
Dreams hold as our arms grasp tightly

I remember her as an early spring morning
Salmon flecks seamlessly across the sky
Sunlight coruscates filaments as shadows melt
Unraveling my loss of control and words

Fitted black standing in the Sonora desert
He etches resplendence, hears nonexistent songs
My illusion dreams burning springtime snapshots
Album keepsakes, before her summer begins
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HysteryDiagnosis Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jul-17-05 08:18 AM
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1. Very very nice..... my my my... who knew the talents we have
in our midst.... :)
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Wetzelbill Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jul-17-05 08:36 AM
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2. well thank you very much....you know..
there are some people around here with some serious abilities. Lots of people on DU are just talented as you can imagine and great at what they do.

I'm not really a poet. I've published a little of mine, but I'm not all that comfortable with it. Mainly a short fiction writer and an essayist.
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WCGreen Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Aug-02-05 12:56 AM
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3. Good poem
Now get out and campaign.....

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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Aug-02-05 08:22 AM
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4. Nice
Edited on Tue Aug-02-05 08:49 AM by oneighty
You might consider putting this in the Poetry group too, if you have not already.

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