Have fun with this one.

[Tom Yossarian Joad]

She lies beneath the well heeled boot


Edited on Fri Dec-30-05 08:59 PM by Tom Yossarian Joad

The pressure cracks her ribs.

they are bigger

So much bigger.

Yet the rib cage still breaks in.

Somehow the air

Still grabs a note.

She fights within the diem.

Parts give in

and Parts stay strong.

It's a race to see who'll feed'em.

Fie hettle sprecken,

It's to see if they will live.

Sprecken hettle thettle hoe...

You kiss them all goodbye.

Thettler hettle sprecken tie.

It's now the time to die.

Say goodbye to
two.
to two hundred years.

Say goodbye to
two.

to Your fathers.

Say goodbye to
two.

to Children,


Say goodbye...

to...

Goodbye.










She cries to the Bush,
the bird and the Roach,
Letting her earth
breath into her throat,
Says goodbye to a life
that once meant
so
much,

Yet now has
faded
become out


of touch.








end














To Mr. Bukowski and for DU


TYJ

[petgoat]

1. Oh that's a laugh a minute. nm

[lapislzi]

2. OK, I have some questions

First, are these two poems?

Second, do you want an in-depth crit? PM me if yes. My credentials are that in addition to being a published author, I have taught writing and judged poetry competitions.

[Tom Yossarian Joad]

3. It's one piece....

Sure. I'd would very much appreciate your critique and suggestions. I have dabbled here and there myself. I'll PM you!

Thanks!