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I am a caffeine nut job. I often write about coffee. I have stories published in which I write about coffee. I'm nearly obsessed with it. Yet, I am quite old-school. I'm from Montana, and come from a cowboy culture. (my dad rodeod, I did, one of my brothers still does) Coffee is much more old-school. I use an typical, classic, cheap drip style coffee maker. I buy gourmet stuff though. My dad, is an old-school Folger's man. I can't even barely touch the stuff though. It's damn near unpalatable to me, haha. Coffee is interesting. For me in conjures up stories. Images. Vivid memories. It's a culture. Being from a reservation and a rural background, coffee is a social event. Neighbors come over to visit and drink coffee. Old farmers get up at 5 AM and head in to town to have breakfast and drink coffee with their friends at a local greasy cafe'. There is this concept in American Indian literature, called the "Kitchen Table" theory. It's the idea that in communal and familial settings, friends, neighbors, relatives etc, always come over to sit at the kitchen table and visit. People talk all morning, all day, and sometimes well into the night, sitting and drinking coffee. I think that's important to understand. That's why I'm telling you this. Coffee is not just a drink, or a passion, it is a culture all in itself. It resonates historically with yuppies, to Cowboys, to reservations and on and on and on. What you wrote suits a purpose, I enjoyed it immensely. But, I'm interested also in what coffee means to you? Why did you choose to write on that topic? You have to have a certain love of coffee, much like I do. That's something to think about maybe the next time you write about it.
As for this, you have convinced me to look into a grinder, at least. I love great coffee! Maybe I don't fully even know what it is, so I better look into the "fresh is best" thing, quickly. :)
As for technique, you do well. Try avoiding a few simple things. Try not to always say, "To" and then use a verb. Like in this sentence: "these small “boutique” roasters will work with you to help you find the perfect blend for your taste and brewing style." You could simply say something like, "these small "boutique roasters will work at helping you find the perfect blend...." Or in this sentence, "I like to keep one of these around to try different coffees but it does lose in the “instant gratification” department." You could just write, " I like keeping one of these around..." Do you see what I mean? It's easy to rectify... I mean rectifying it is easy. :)
Also, the word "very" should be shot and savagely murdered, imho. It isn't bad if it's used sparingly, but just be wary of overuse. You don't overuse it at all, however watch out for it. It's often unnecessary clutter that takes the "pop" out of the sentence. It can also be eliminated by using other more descriptive words too. Like instead of saying something is "very fine" you could say "extremely fine." Just a simple but effective technique as well.
All in all, I liked this alot. I happen to be a writer, which automatically makes me an arrogant, elitist dickhead, so I give long boring critiques on people's work, lol. Good work though. Truly enjoyed it.
Hail coffee!!!!
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