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oxbow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Apr-24-06 08:36 PM
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Can you give this essay some constructive criticism please?
I'm thinking about posting this to GD later. Thought I'd run it by my mystic friends here first though. I'm a bit worried about watering down the message too much, and whether this essay offers good solid advice that can help a person live with less fear in the coming days. Please be honest and merciless if need be, because I want this to be as good as it can be! (Any suggestions for a title are also greatly appreciated)

Thanks in advance y'all.




We are living through some major history right now. The series of events unfolding before us since 9-11 is about as big as they come. The fall of the Roman Empire, the ministry of Jesus, World War II, all of these times must have been challenging and just plain crazy to live through. Likewise, our days under the Bush Administration are filled with uncertainty and much fear. Fear for our country, our fellow human beings here and abroad, and sadly, for all life on this planet.

It’s not just the United States that's changed dramatically in the past few years though; While our leaders have been off playing the empire building game in Iraq (and failing horribly at it) the world has gone and changed on us. China has been growing at phenomenal rates, and will outshine the US both economically and militarily in the next decade or so. Russia is also slowly getting on its feet, and India has become another powerhouse in the world economies. If the EU finally figures out how to work together, that is another major player on the stage. All of these countries need massive resources, such as oil, metals, wood, silicon and other vital materials, to keep their economies growing. The world is about to get a whole lot flatter, meaning that the American standard of living is taking a major downturn soon. Not to even mention the environmental impact of all this massive growth! Clearly, the world is becoming something else right before our eyes.

Now, all of this change can seem very daunting to someone who cares about the world, and the people in it. There’s so much that needs to be fixed, so many things that we could be doing. It can be paralyzing to even think about things sometimes. Where do we even start when madmen hold the reins of power, and normal people seem unwilling to listen to reason and compassion?

We start by taking a deep breath. Life has existed on this planet for billions of years before us, and will continue to thrive long after we are gone. We might be able to upset the balance temporarily, but nature will eventually restore it without a doubt. Things may not turn out the way we want or expect them to but invariably, they will turn out as well as they can. The sun will still shine tomorrow, no matter how dark things look tonight.

Likewise, even though we have thieves and madmen in charge right now, they have had to lie and cheat their way into power. That means that for the most part, people are goodhearted and compassionate, and actually care about things like freedom and equality. And despite anyone’s best efforts, you can only keep a lie going for so long. Reality has a way of showing up liars for exactly what they are. We are seeing that right now in Iraq, in our inner cities, in New Orleans, on the icecaps (or lack thereof) of our planet’s poles. Like the song says, you can’t fool all the people all the time. Eventually, it becomes too hard to ignore reality.

I don’t know if you believe in God or not, but I think most everyone can believe in fate. You have been put on this earth at this time for a reason. If you don’t believe this, maybe you should start acting like you do. It can’t hurt things, and it might conceivably help you live a life with some meaning (and gratitude). Each of us has a role to play here, so we might as well start acting like it.

This still doesn’t answer my original question though: How do we act in such an uncertain world, where there are so many problems to tackle and so little time and influence for each of us? Simply put, we have to act without caring about the outcome. That means that we understand that whatever we do, things will never turn out exactly the way we want them to. If intent and outcome were the same thing, then the war in Iraq would really have been the cakewalk the Bushies expected it to be. We would have the flowers and the cheap gas they were expecting, and American forces would be already invading Iran right now.

No, in order to act in this world, we have to stop grabbing at outcomes. We have to stop clinging to what we want the world to be like, and dance with it as it really is. This doesn’t mean that we resign ourselves to anything! We can still act upon this world. Indeed, action is the only moral option in the face of injustice. However, we can still act without being dependant upon a certain outcome for our happiness. Things will never turn out the way we imagine them being in the future. We have to accept that or face a life of one disappointment after another. In Buddhism, this is called a state of nonattachment. You identify your values, set your intentions based on them, and act upon the world with a mind not attached to outcome. This way, whatever happens, you can be content in knowing that did your very best and stayed true to your core. You are not dependant on external events to make you happy so much as whether or not your actions reflect your values. You are not responsible for saving the world, only for doing what you can. You have to have a certain amount of trust that things WILL turn out alright in the end to be this way, of course. If you believe in God, that's where He comes in. If you don't, then you can still be comforted by the thought that life is resilient. Despite living in a world that doesn't care much about us or our wishes one way or another, we have made it this far. If the past is any indication, then Life has what it takes to continue living, no matter what the world throws at us.

Let me say one more time that you do not have to resign yourself to anything to live in a state of nonattachment. Change will come to our country and the world no matter what we do. The Neocons cannot control people through fear and lies forever, just as people cannot keep polluting the planet forever. Reality will catch up with them. And when it does, more and more people will see that we have to change the way we run our media, our government, our very way of life, or perish altogether. But until that day comes, we do what we can. We clean up the streams and rivers in our backyards. We educate ourselves and other people in our lives. We help elect people who share our values and compassion for others. We live our lives. And I mean that we LIVE our lives!

We enjoy the little things that bring us joy. The warm sun on our bare skin, the taste of a really good meal, the pleasure of good company, all of these are things we can enjoy even in the darkest hours. The universe could have been made so that such things didn’t bring us pleasure. There is no reason why a flower HAS to be beautiful, or sex MUST feel as good as it does. Miraculously though, it is and it does! Try and remember that when things are rough, and you’ll do just fine. And when you catch yourself enjoying life, say a quick thank you. Thank the universe for being the way it is, and yourself for being the way you are, which is just fine.
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DemExpat Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Apr-25-06 02:46 AM
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1. Oxbow...I'm in over my head with lots of work on my own essays
for my studies, :argh: so I don't have the time today to give you feedback, but just letting you know I enjoyed reading your essay this morning.


My quick impression is that this in this form will not be appreciated in GD - perhaps because of the length.

:hug:

DemEx
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jokerman93 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Apr-25-06 11:17 AM
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2. No real critiques here but...
Edited on Tue Apr-25-06 12:08 PM by jokerman93
what's life without a little joy, eh? Sometimes resolving to be open-hearted and looking for the beauty, pleasure and continuity in life despite all the seemingly negative conditions can be a high form of dissent (even a bit revolutionary these days!). Yes! Life finds a way and beauty survives. Always has. Always will. We do need to remind each other of that from time to time, don't we?

I say post your essay Oxbow - if you're inclined to. Who knows? Maybe there's one person out there who will see it, read it, and "get" what you're being moved to say. Maybe you're writing this for them as well as that part of yourself that wants to be reminded. If it's from the heart, it'll find its way into the right hands. I believe it often works that way.

You keep going!
:D
J
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I Have A Dream Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Apr-25-06 11:40 AM
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3. I agree. Not everyone will resonate with it, but many will...
and they're the people that you're trying to reach. Many people like inspirational messages like this. I like the fact that you addressed people who are consciously spiritual and those who consider themselves to not be spiritual.

I liked it!

I have no idea for the title. Sorry.
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stellanoir Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Apr-25-06 12:42 PM
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4. Oxbow
Really uplifting message and I think completely worthy of posting.

I put up an earlier version of my writing that was spiritually oriented and inclusive of "19 tricks or Weapons of Massive Reintegration for Global Amelioration," back in November. It ended up on the Greatest Page and garnered all sorts of thanks and accolades from those who had lapsed in their spirituality and appreciated greatly being gently reminded. .

With the flame wars and shit storms that often ensue over in GD it's a good deed to try and raise the vibrations over there. Good luck.

PM me if you want to see my lately version.

Let us know on this thread when you post it so we can chime in and give you some support.

Good writing and Bon Chance dear.
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I Have A Dream Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Apr-25-06 01:05 PM
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5. Good idea, Stellanoir! I'd love to lend my support once he...
posts it.
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oxbow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Apr-25-06 03:44 PM
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6. thanks all! I'll be sure and post it in the next few days to GD
until then, God bless and much love...
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oxbow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Apr-27-06 10:44 AM
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7. Ok it's been posted to GD
http://www.democraticunderground.com/discuss/duboard.php?az=view_all&address=364x1037797

thanks for the words of encouragement guys. It was almost as much for myself than for other people, to get my thoughts cleared out and deal with my own uncertainties and fears. Hopefully, someone else will benefit from it as well tho
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I Have A Dream Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Apr-27-06 10:59 AM
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8. You're already on the greatest page!
Great job, oxbow!

:hug:
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oxbow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Apr-27-06 11:02 AM
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9. thanks, it's good to hit a chord
to know that people have been thinking about what you have, and can appreciate the way you're looking at things. I hope it helps DU'ers be easier on themselves in the coming days.

Much love to you, Dream :hug:
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