A Fisherman's Night Dream
oneighty
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Fri May-13-05 06:02 PM
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A Fisherman's Night Dream |
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I throw my anchor to the muddy creek. The boat drifts back on the falling tide. The anchor holds. I make it fast tight and neat Make it fast to the forward cleat.
I move about and clean the deck Nets hung high so they can dry. Gear all stowed and put away All is set for another day.
Now in the galley I make supper Onions shrimp and bread and butter. Fish and beans and boiled rice. All washed down with Kool Aid water.
A clean white sheet upon my bed A soft clean pillow to rest my head Another sheet to keep some heat. A cool wind is gently blowing. Oh! Sure it will be a wonderful night.
I lay back and stare at darkness Ancient memories within my head Of olden friends some now dead Of those I loved and those I wronged. Bitter memories tear my soul.
The earth turns beneath the water The rising tide will shortly follow Turning my boat from end to end Sleep in turn calms my fears I close my eyes on lonely tears.
An olive face drifts into view Within her arms a crying child Her slanted eyes search my soul Her brown dry eyes are wild, wild. Oh Lord I beg her, let me be.
I bolt upright from sweating sleep My trembling feet on the dewy deck My pounding heart is slowing down. What is that scratching? What is that sound? On the blue painted bottom of my boat.
What creepy thing engulfs my soul? What pulls and twists me to the rail? What takes me into muddy water? And chokes forever my screams of terror.
Taken there by those once loved.
1979
From 'Voyages of the Vicky Mary' Copyright 2005
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Fri May-13-05 07:12 PM
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I like how you change the mood of the poem going from pleasant to disturbed. I think that if you've lived enough that there will always be memories that haunt you. I started noticing that in my twenties. And if you spend a lot of time alone the more haunted you can become.
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Fri May-13-05 07:57 PM
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2. I came in off the ocean on the Vicky Mary |
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that evening and anchored up in a creek safe from ocean storms. AS I lay there waiting for sleep I wrote this in my mind-later on paper.
Thanks for your comments. I will soon be out of poems.
Many will say yeaaaaaa!
Hee hee hee,
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Fri May-13-05 09:20 PM
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I love your poems. You're just going to have to write some more so you can share them with us. I haven't written a poem in about a year, but I plan on getting it together so I can post some more here. Unlike you, my poems are not of a professional grade. But at DU you're just a few clicks away from being a published author. I hope you decide to stay with the poetry group even if you do not decide to write more poetry.
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Sat May-14-05 12:37 AM
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Maybe you can find some more hidden inside.
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Sat May-14-05 01:04 AM
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5. once a poet, always a poet.... even if a poem hasn't been written |
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in years....
so says this "I haven't written in years" poet. *wan smile*
ok-- no pressure. Even if you have no inclination to write -- hope you'll pop in here once and awhile still.
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Sat May-14-05 01:09 AM
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6. the progression into darkness starts subtly, and suddenly in the |
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end we are taken down a very dark path. Speaker has questions that are unanswered -- reader does too. Speaker doesn't need to answer the questions for the reader (it's not the speaker's obligation to do so) ... the nightmarish quality is sufficient, yet
-- what is the ghost that haunts?
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Sat May-14-05 08:07 AM
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As described in 'Batten Down the Hatches Lads' as told in this poetry thread. Her name was Kazuko. I have written many words for her. Fifty years ago in June I left her. I did not keep my promise to return.
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Mon May-16-05 08:51 AM
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8. you have a Poets soul Ed |
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and most people only dream of being loved as Kazuko is loved
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