Work in Progress

[pinerow]

Whisper
Ramon Piñero 5/21/2005

Quietly,
like a whisper
in a dream
she moved
about the
caverns
in my
head
she stole
softly
into
my
heart
and
and
escaped
before
I could
tie
her
down.

softly
like
a
springtime
breeze
I
felt
her
breath
all
over my
skin
goosebumps
and
tingles
butterfly
kisses
against
my cheek

she
still
electrifies
the air
and
my hair
stands on
end
just
remembering
the last
time
her lips
met mine
when her
touch
reached deep
into
my
soul
and said
I love you.

[Steel City Slim]

1. Whew!

That is very nice.

[pinerow]

2. Thanks...I'm not sure I'll do anyting more with...I kinda like it the

way it is...

[Droopy]

3. It is wonderful the way it is

A very powerful love poem. I think that if you added to it that it might take away from the intensity that you have now. At least it would be hard to match and keep up I would think.

[pinerow]

4. You have a point...it ain't broke...why fix it...lol

[JitterbugPerfume]

5. every woman

dreams of being loved like that

[pinerow]

6. JitterBug...flattery will get you most anything....lol

nt