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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:37 PM
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Editorial in High School Newspaper by my Granddaughter
She just finished working on it and wanted me to review it and I was impressed. She may have to shorten it as they have space limits, hope not. We live in a repub area so this could be interesting.


"As the world embarks on a new year, many people make new year's resolutions. Some promise to get organized while others decide to lose weight, our President however, has made it his goal to salvage some sort of victory in Iraq. His "last ditch effort," as it is commonly referred to, consists of having a surge of 21,500 additional U.S. troops in Iraq.

The majority of Democrats (92 percent), a surprising number of Republicans and Bush loyalists (31 percent), as well as most Americans (68 percent) oppose his plan. In fact, the only ones who appear even slightly enthusiastic about the "surge" are neo-conservatives - those who led the drive into Iraq, and two of their increasingly small number of Congressional supporters: Republican Sen. John McCain and Democratic Sen. Joseph Lieberman.

Many reporters and television hosts are also in opposition to an escalation of troops, including Keith Olbermann of MSNBC who stated to Mr. Bush on his show that, "You have lost the military. You have lost the Congress to the Democrats. You have lost most of the Iraqis. You have lost many of the Republicans. You have lost our allies.You are losing the credibility, not just of your presidency, but more importantly of the office itself. And most imperatively, you are guaranteeing that more American troops will be losing their lives, and more families their loved ones. You are guaranteeing it!"

President Bush, who has recently received his lowest ratings so far for his handling of the war (24 percent) and terrorism (41 percent) - told a group of U.S. television stations that "I believe it will work." Also, despite the fact that almost half of all respondents in the latest NEWSWEEK poll (46 percent) want to see American troops pulled out "as soon as possible," Bush states "I will not withdraw, even if Laura and Barney are the only ones supporting me."

Even more shocking, last November Iraqi Prime Minister Nouri al-Maliki and his National Security Adviser proposed that U.S. troops withdraw to the outskirts of Baghdad and let Iraqis take over security in the strife-torn capital. Maliki stated that he did not want any more U.S. troops at all, just more authority. According to accounts from several administration officials, Bush seemed to have listened intently to the unexpected proposal and even impressed that Maliki had taken the initiative, but it did not take him long to reject the idea. The President flatly told his advisers that the Maliki plan was not going to work because the Iraqis were not up to the task.

Now, even his own military commanders are telling him no more troops are needed. Army Gens. John P. Abizaid, the Middle East commander, and George W. Casey Jr., the commander in Iraq, opposed the influx of U.S. forces because they were unconvinced it would change the dynamics on the ground. However, Bush still believes it is best to try once again to put an end to sectarian violence in Baghdad, even if it's at the risk of putting more U.S. soldiers into a crossfire between Sunni insurgents and Shiite militias.

Commander George Casey attempted to compromise by asking for two more brigades for Baghdad, plus a third that would be stationed in Kuwait as a reserve and two others that would be put on call back in the United States, but Bush decided that was not enough. Instead, Bush decided to replace Casey with Army Lt. Gen. David H. Petraeus who was supportive of more troops than Casey requested.

Democrats are now faced with the responsibility of countering President Bush's horrible plan by finding a way to keep him from implementing a surge as well as proposing another plan in its place. One possible option includes placing restrictions on spending, however some are unsure that this will be beneficial.

"How do you cut off funding without putting existing troops at risk?" asked Rep. Adam Smith. Yet at the same time Smith feels that Bush's plan is not sufficient to lift the country from civil war and stabilize the government.

Many are now seeing stark similarities between Vietnam and the current situation in Iraq. Representative Jay Inslee commented saying, "There are 15,000 to 20,000 names on the (Vietnam Memorial) Wall because Congress did not stop a misguided policy. Congress needs to stand up to the president."

On January 17, 2007, three Congresswomen did just that. At Capitol Hill they spoke out against an escalation of troops in Iraq, and laid out an alternative plan to the “Bush Way Forward”. Rep. Lynn Woolsey, Rep. Barbara Lee, and Rep. Maxine Waters introduced the Bring Our Troops Home and Sovereignty of Iraq Restoration Act.

“Last Wednesday night, President Bush demonstrated to the world that he continues to deny the realities on the ground in Iraq. Instead of putting forth a plan that would withdraw our troops, the President is increasing our military presence, by escalating the number of troops by over twenty thousand. What the President fails to grasp is that our military presence is only fueling the insurgency, plunging Iraq further into chaos and civil war,” said Rep. Lynn Woolsey.

The bill, which was proposed in response to President Bush’s challenge for anyone who opposes his plan to come up with one of their own, lays out a comprehensive plan as to the cost and framework for a withdrawal from Iraq. It establishes a 6-month timeframe to withdraw all military forces currently stationed in Iraq, creates a basic framework which would provide stability in Iraq during and after the troop withdrawal, and guarantees full health care funding for our veterans. It also accelerates the training of Iraqi security forces and authorizes an international stabilization force if requested by the Iraqi government. However, such a force would only be funded for two years and be combined with economic and humanitarian assistance. In addition it repeals the Congressional Authorization for the War in Iraq, prevents construction of permanent military bases in the country, and states that Iraqi oil belongs to the Iraqis. All of this done so for just pennies on the dollar in comparison to how much we are currently spending to fund the war in Iraq."


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illinoisprogressive Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:39 PM
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1. How old is she? she writes beautifully and could be a journalist.
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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:52 PM
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3. Thank you. She is 18 and has considered journalism
Edited on Sun Jan-21-07 11:53 PM by lyonn
After I read this I concluded she should consider journalism in the field of politics! She has applied to Pepperdine University and is interested in philosophy, teaching or journalism.

Edit: She is one the her school's two Editors.
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CrazyOrangeCat Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:51 PM
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2. She did great!
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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:57 PM
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Thanks
I like the way she got her digs in politely. Also, emphasising how Rep. Woolsey was responding to bush's challenge to an alternative to His plan.
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demosincebirth Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:57 PM
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4. Whew!
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illinoisprogressive Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Jan-21-07 11:57 PM
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5. She is going places
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alittlelark Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 12:09 AM
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6. Your Granddaughter wrote a great LTTE -
I'm sure you are proud!

Small critique to pass on - She should change Liebermans affiliation to 'Independant'. He is an Independant, not a Democrat.
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EFerrari Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 12:21 AM
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7. Good work!
K&R
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orleans Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 12:24 AM
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8. this is wonderful. she did a great job.
(and next week or month when the paper comes out and she runs a correction about lieberman she can add in some information as to why he no longer is a democrat--or why the democrats didn't want him)

(glad to see her school was letting her run the piece)

tell her to check this article out:
http://www.informationliberation.com/?id=19344

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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 12:48 AM
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9. Editor's reply
Hey! This is Megan, Lyonn's granddaughter and the author of this article.

I just wanted to state that the paper has not yet been sent to press so I still have plenty of time to make corrections if needed. The reason why I did not take the time to explain that technically Lieberman is an "Independent Democrat" because he was unable to win in the Democratic primary for the Connecticut Senate nomination was due to the fact that I only have a limited amount of space. I accidently got a bit carried away as it is so I may have to shorten it, but if it turns out that I have room then I will definitely add it in.

Should I change it to say "Independent Sen. Joseph Lieberman," or "Independent-Democrat Sen. Joseph Lieberman," instead? I originally labeled him as a Democrat because it is my understanding that he caucuses with the Democrats.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my article, and leaving comments and critiques! I appreciate all of them!
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kath Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:19 AM
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11. I think it should say "Independent Sen. Joseph Lieberman", since
he did NOT run as the Democratic nominee.
There are other independents who caucus with the Dems, but they are still labeled as "Independent", not "Democratic" - e.g Jim Jeffords, Bernie Sanders.
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Progressive Idealist Donating Member (9 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 02:18 AM
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17. Thanks! I made the correction.
I think you're right. He didn't win the election as a Democrat, so he technically isn't a one.
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newyawker99 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 10:46 AM
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23. Hi Progressive Idealist!!
Welcome to DU!! :toast:
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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:06 AM
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10. P.S.
This is Megan again.

Orleans: I just read the article, "Claiming the Prize: Bush Surge Aimed at Securing Iraqi Oil," and I found it extremely interesting. Thank you for sending me the link! It actually gives me an idea for another article for the newspaper.

Oh and also, this was not a LTTE, I am the Editor-in-Chief of the newspaper lol. I write political editorials such as this for each issue of the newspaper.
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kath Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:37 AM
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13. Impressive editorial. You write VERY well.
Two tiny little nitpicks (other than the Lieberman thing):

1) In the 1st paragraph, "Some promise to get organized while others decide to lose weight, our President however, has made it his goal to salvage some sort of victory in Iraq." -- I may be wrong here, but you probably need to put a period after "lose weight" and start a new sentence. You may be able to use a semicolon here instead, but it's too late for me to find my grammar book to decide which is best. :-)



2) In the 5th paragraph, "...Bush seemed to have listened intently to the unexpected proposal and even impressed that Maliki had taken the initiative...", it looks like you left out the word "seemed" before "impressed".

Very good job!

I'm curious - do you live in OK, like your grandma? Does the school administration let such, umm, "unpatriotic" ;-) things get published in the school paper? BTW, the ACLU puts out a publication called "The Rights of Students" (or at least they used to) which you may find helpful, and which could perhaps be fodder for future editorials. It covers freedom of the high school press, among many other issues. The rights of teenagers REALLY seem to coming under fire these days...

I also live in OK, and long for more liberal pastures...
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Progressive Idealist Donating Member (9 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 02:02 AM
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16. This is Megan, I made my own username!
Edited on Mon Jan-22-07 02:11 AM by Progressive Idealist
I decided I would go ahead and create my own username on here and stop replying under my grandma's name lol.

Anyway, I agree with both of your nitpicks. I think I am going to go with a semicolon for the first sentence, I think it would flow better that way. Unless of course, my teacher feels that a period would be better after she edits it. Both appear correct to me. I will also put a "seemed" before "impressed".

As for the school administration allowing such "unpatriotic" articles to slip in, well, I'm the Editor so I plan each newspaper and decide what articles will be put in the newspaper, which reporter will write which article, what page each article goes on, etc. Any controversial articles, such as most of the ones I write, I take to the publications adviser and have her approve them. If she feels it is too controversial she takes it to the Principle and he either okays it or rejects it. I haven't had any articles rejected so far, but the adviser is liberal and agrees with me on most things so that could be why.

I do in fact live in OK, with my grandma actually. We watch the news (evil NBC haha) together all the time, especially Keith Olbermann. He's definitely my favorite.

I've never heard of the publication put out by the ACLU, but I will definitely look into it. It sounds like something I would be interested in.

Oh and thank you for the compliment on my writing!!

Edit: I've decided to not use "seemed" before "impressed" because I used seemed earlier in the sentence and when I read it to myself it sounded a bit redundant. Instead I'm going to change the sentence to: "According to accounts from several administration officials, Bush seemed to have listened intently to the unexpected proposal and even appeared impressed that Maliki had taken the initiative, but it did not take him long to reject the idea."
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kath Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 02:50 AM
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18. You're right - "appeared" is better than "seemed" there.
What was I thinking? <thunks self on forehead> If you used "seemed", your teacher/editor would get out the red pencil, circle it, and write "rep" for repetitive! (had a very picky English teacher junior year, so I know the drill. But, boy, did he teach us how to write!)

In Googling to try to find the ACLU publication I mentioned, I found this site:

http://freechild.org/student_rights.htm#ACLU

Here's an ACLU page on student rights:
http://www.aclu.org/studentsrights/index.html Lots of links to sub-topis on right side of page (I'll have to check out the one on "off-campus conduct" tomorrow -- it boggles my mind that schools are severely punishing students for things that they do ON THEIR OWN TIME, away from school.)
Also http://www.nyclu.org/stdt_foe.html

I think this is the book I remember. Amazon makes it look like it's out of print
http://www.amazon.com/ACLU-Handbook-Rights-Students/dp/0140377840/sr=1-3/qid=1169451441/ref=sr_1_3/002-6442571-0200855?ie=UTF8&s=books

but it looks like SIU press may publish the title currently:
http://www.siu.edu/~siupress/series/aclu_handbooks.htm

Also, one of the ACLU's "Sybil Liberties" pamplhet-pages for students has a link at the bottom for ordering "The Rights of Students" handbook, but I couldn't get it to work.

There's so much stuff available, and downloadable, on the Web that the book may be redundant. The Florida ACLU's site has a lengthy, downloadable (or purchasable) student rights handbook.

G'night!
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Progressive Idealist Donating Member (9 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 05:25 PM
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27. Thanks!
I checked out the websites whose links you sent me, and they're really interesting. The second link led me to a fascinating article about how California students won the right to freedom of speech in their high school. I thought it was pretty cool.

I think you're right, from what little I've seen there seems to be an ample amount of information available for free on the internet. By the way, thank you for taking to the time to find those website for me!

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ninkasi Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 02:51 AM
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19. Your writing is wonderful
I'm impressed, and hope you continue writing. You could have a great future in journalism. Welcome to DU, and I'd love to see more of your opinions posted here. Good luck.
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orleans Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 05:07 AM
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20. megan, you did a wonderful job with your editorial. (and i did understand
that this was not a ltte--i think someone else said it was)

i know politics can make a person's head spin--so for an eighteen year old to be writing pieces like this is actually commendable. my daughter is eighteen and i try to keep her politically interested, updated, & aware. she was an election judge in the november election, she voted. but the majority of her friends (who were eighteen) didn't. her and i were talking about it the other night and she said she believes that their mindset is that if something doesn't directly effect them then they can't be bothered/they're indifferent. i think it has much to do with upbringing. (and from what i know of their parents i suspect the parents weren't voting either.)

if that article i linked you to gave you an idea for another editorial, then maybe you would also think about this article someone gave me the link to the other day. it is on playboy.com (no joke) and it starts out: "if you think the iraq war hasn't worked out very well for anyone, think again. defense contractors such as lockheed are thriving. and no wonder: here's the story of how lockheed's interests--as opposed to those of the american citizenry--set the course of u.s. policy after 9/11"
http://www.playboy.com/magazine/features/lockheed/download.pdf

if that pdf link doesn't work then just google the title of the article: "lockheed stock and two smoking barrels"

it is long--to be honest i haven't had a chance to finish reading it--but if you can follow it then it might be interesting to you. i learned that lynne cheney was on the board of lockheed and is getting deferred compensation. and also dick cheney's son-in-law is a registered lockheed lobbyist. (so...this adds to the thought of dick sitting at the head of haliburton, now with his deferred compensation. and since so many of us suspected he's the power behind the throne is it any wonder what degree their deferred compensation will increase by once he leaves office and the kick-backs come rolling in for all the war business he sent their way?)

and a final suggestion: watch the dvd called "why we fight" by eugene jarecki. it explains the monster, the beast of the "military industrial complex" and how our war machines & war related companies are simply out of control. the movie talks about how serving in the armed forces was an honorable thing to do (as it was back in the day when my dad fought in world war 2). now it's all business--big business--mind blowing big. (much of this also deals with this iraq war and also hits on 9/11). it's a documentary everyone needs to see.

http://www.sonyclassics.com/whywefight/

google video has it up so you can watch it online:
http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=-4924034461280278026&q=why+we+fight&hl=en

i bought the dvd and on the special features there is a q&a with the director by a few audiences. one audience is in a high school where the film was screened. the high school q&a is only a few minutes but it was interesting.

(sorry i didn't reply sooner--i took a break to watch "the corporation" -- it's a good documentary too -- i'm guessing your grandma will pass this message on to you. good luck. have fun. and keep writing!)
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Progressive Idealist Donating Member (9 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 06:11 PM
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30. I agree. Many of my fellow high school students are simply uninterested..
Edited on Mon Jan-22-07 06:14 PM by Progressive Idealist
..and don't seem to care. However, they are still extremely opinionated. I get in more political arguments in a week then you can imagine lol. Two already today. A common argument is that we need to support any decision made by the president simply because he is our president. Oh, and he is an honest man doing the best he can. I generally respond by pointing out that George Bush, though he is our wonderful president and clearly impervious to immorality, has, in fact, lied. For starters, he said the International Atomic Energy Agency had produced a report in 1998 stating that Iraq was just six months away from developing a nuclear weapon; no such report existed. In fact, the IAEA actually reported that there was not even an indication that Iraq had the ability to produce weapons-grade material. Furthermore, just two days before launching the war, Bush said, "Intelligence gathered by this and other governments leaves no doubt that the Iraq regime continues to possess and conceal some of the most lethal weapons ever devised." Yet former deputy CIA director Richard Kerr, who conducted a review of the prewar intelligence, said that intelligence was full of qualifiers and caveats, and based on circumstantial and inferential evidence.

In defense of the war in Iraq, many argue that we had to go in because Al Qaeda was stationed there and we had to attack them before they had another chance to attack us. My rebuttal generally consists of me telling them how both the Senate Intelligence Committee and the 9-11 Commission found “no credible evidence of a collaborative relationship between Iraq and Al Qaeda,” and that the Commision stressed that it had access to the exact same information that Vice President Cheney had seen prior to the 9/11 attacks. In fact, In September 2003, Bush admitted that there was no evidence linking Iraq to 9-11.

Anyway, I didn't plan on getting so carried away on that but I find it interesting how uninformed so many people my age are.

I've begun reading the article you sent me the link to, but have not yet finished it. So far it's quite...arresting. I found this quote to be particularly good: "This was months before Secretary of State Colin Powell would go to the United Nations to make the administration’s case for the invasion of Iraq, touting the subsequently discredited evidence of weapons of mass destruction. But according to Jackson, Hadley told him that “they were going to war and were struggling with a rationale” to justify it. Jackson, recalling the meeting, reports that Hadley said they were “still working out” a cause, too, but asked that he, Jackson, “set up something like the Committee on NATO” to come up with a rationale.""

Equally interesting, the rationale they came up with, "that Saddam was a monster—routinely violating human rights—and a general menace in the Middle East," and that military action was required to remove him, is another one of the more common arguments I hear in favor of the invasion of Iraq.

Anyway, I shall end here. I will definitely take the time to watch the video you recommended but have not gotten around to it yet. Thanks for sending me those links!!
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orleans Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 10:17 PM
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33. i remember my daughter spending hours on the phone ....i mean
hours and hours and i'd go in her room and she'd be talking to one of her "republican" friends, arguing politics! she'd be explaining, reading articles to them, etc. (i don't remember when i first noticed this--i'm guessing it started in 2002.)

and she'd bring their arguments back to me later and her and i would talk, i'd try to explain my viewpoint, and she would mull it around and try to come up with a way to present the alternative to her friends in ways they would not find offensive--so that they would listen to her.

it went on for years (although, by no means was that all they talked about).

and i guess they would discuss politics over lunch and in study hall. my poor girl--surrounded by so many conservatives. (we live in a horribly republican county.) i suspect you might be in the same situation. i know it's hard--i grew up around here too. but unlike my daughter, i cut my ties with people like that and sought out a crowd of free-thinkers, creatives, artists, and rebels.

and after all these years i get this slow trickle of information about her friends that so-and-so doesn't like bush, thinks he is wrong, thinks he screwed this up and that up.

finally.

hang in there, kiddo. this country needs people like you (and my daughter) to keep fighting the good fight.

by the way, here is a little background on bruce jackson
http://rightweb.irc-online.org/profile/1233
"Wrote one Jackson critic: “Mr. Jackson was Vice President for Strategy and Planning at Lockheed Martin Corporation, which means that while Jackson was founding the U.S. Committee for NATO and the Project for Transitional Democracies; while he was serving on the board of the Project for the New American Century; and while he was chairing the Republican Party subcommittee on foreign policy -- all of which advocated more defense spending -- Bruce P. Jackson was also working for a company that stood to gain the most from stepped up spending on weapons."" (from the above link)


and this website has character profiles, along with company & organizational tidbits--you might find some interesting information or connections if you click on a few things:
http://rightweb.irc-online.org/profile/?sort=title_tagline#gov
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Progressive Idealist Donating Member (9 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-23-07 12:44 AM
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35. Ahh yeah I feel her pain, I live in an extremely conservative area too and
Edited on Tue Jan-23-07 12:44 AM by Progressive Idealist
am one of a very small pool of liberal students. A surprising number are beginning to come around and admit that Bush has made mistakes in relation to the war in Iraq and that he is, in fact, not a good President, however.

Thanks for the links! I'm actually about to go to bed so I'll have to check it tomorrow though. Ever since grandma introduced me to this site I have been feverishly reading article after article in the forums and now my eyes are beginning to hurt lol.

Good night!
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roguevalley Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:28 AM
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12. your granddaughter is utterly fab. well done.
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FrenchieCat Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:41 AM
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14. Too great......wow!
:thumbsup:
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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:59 AM
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15. Thanks FrenchieCat
Loved the quote from Keith O.! I had no part in any of it, obviously. She didn't get her writing ability from me. Ha

She once asked me who my favorite news person was, newspaper project type question, and at the time no one was outstanding, later I told her it was Keith O. Looks like she listened.
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Berry Cool Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 07:02 AM
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21. Good choice.
I would say, not bad, Megan. Just watch the punctuation and always remember, don't feel pressured to come up with lots of synonyms for "said" ("stated," "commented," etc.)--"said" will do just fine. You go!
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malaise Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 07:07 AM
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22. You must be proud of your granddaughter
She clearly does her homework and writes beautifully.
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lyonn Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:32 PM
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24. She is an "upper" for her grandmother!
My daughter misses her something awful but, G-daughter was raised in the OKC area and all her friends and family live here and she didn't fit in the Tulsa area where her parents moved. So, my daughter decided when Meg wanted to move back to OKC it was best for her, that is a special mom! My daughter did a good job.

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truedelphi Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 01:47 PM
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25. Covers all the bases and is very eloquent n/t
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DavidDvorkin Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 02:16 PM
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26. Very well written
Congratulations to her (and to you, for contributing genes!).
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Philosoraptor Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 05:27 PM
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28. She'll make a GREAT president.
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JacksonWest Donating Member (561 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 05:36 PM
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29. I think it's ninety percent perfect. Just a thought on what to add:
Her essay is well written and covers a gambit of sources that really make her point. However, there is one glaring omission. She needs to explain why the surge would not work. Instead, she explains who opposes it. This won't carry any weight with republicans. However, if she explained that we have attempted a surge twice before(As Joe Bidden did on Meet the Press) and that the result was a temporary scattering of insurgents outside of Baghdad- that would make it perfect. There is a logic to the opposition. Unlike Republicans, Democrats are not blindly following cues from their talk show hosts and sycophantic televangelists-there is a logical reason for opposing the surge beyond Bush's incredible incompetence.

The definition of insanity is doing the same thing over and over, and expecting different results.
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Progressive Idealist Donating Member (9 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 06:22 PM
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32. Good point.
Now that you mention it, I should have realized I needed to do that. Making a statement, such as "no more troops are needed" or that it is a "horrible plan" won't carry any weight or change anyone's perspective if I don't back that up with legitimate reasons as to why.

I will definitely make the edit. Thanks for the critique, I really appreciate it! I think it will make the article more substantial.
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Eurobabe Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 06:15 PM
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31. Great job, she's got a bright future ahead of her.


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hayu_lol Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Jan-22-07 10:53 PM
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34. A great letter indeed!
Edited on Mon Jan-22-07 10:56 PM by hayu_lol
Good to see someone young who seems to know more than most adults and feels strongly about her subject.

I've posted this link over at

http://www.democrats.com/node/11767
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